Revision requires a more in-depth evaluation of your work than proofreading. Revision is concerned with your ideas, organization, purpose, and audience.
Eliminating weak verbs A somewhat hidden source of sentence trouble is the verb chosen by the writer.
Using the Paramedic Method for concise sentences (JMU Handout)
How to make your writing more concise A common problem for writers of all levels is the use of wordy and imprecise language.